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Premonition Blues

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October 22, 2012
Premonition Blues by ~dead-now paints vivid monochrome strokes until the end.
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The snow was heavy
under midnight's guise.
The white ground reflected
city lights into the clouds:
it was as bright as the half light
that bled over the mountains
and flowed into the valleys
just hours before (the sun
died peacefully).

The air was silent:
a powder keg soundtrack
sitting on a camel's back.
There were dead flags
on poles or lying in ashes.
Smoke seeped through the earth
on every horizon
like the breath
of a dragon slumbering
after a fierce campaign.

No one was left
to inhale the dust and ash.
Their bodies were dormant
and they dreamed their faith.

And a Dandelion stood stout
in a field of grey and soot.

--
Very much inspired by Godspeed You! Black Emperor and their 'Dead Flag Blues.' This is obvious, though, to those that are familiar with it.

Not my greatest work. But it will do for now. Suggestions are always welcome.

EDIT: Yes I did.
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Ateendra's avatar
I really am a simple person and don't understand much but when I see a good thing, I can point it out. This poem here is just sublime. I can't express the joy I get by reading these lines because I was looking for something which could soothe my nerves. Not always do we have to be sunny and brimming with energy. Sometimes grey, silent echoes of imagery bring you more joy, when you want peace. This helped me bring peace to my mind and gave me some patience. Now I can continue with my Jedi training. May the Force be with you.